Editing Day #1

After editing Brianna's paper, I learned that it is very important to keep a very clear tension throughout the entire paper. I think it is very important to make a genealogy effective, to make sure you have a very concise tension throughout the entire paper, otherwise your definition of the word gets a little lost. Also, I learned that it is important to make sure your personal stories are very concise. The longer they are, or wordier they are, the less effective they are. The paper should not end up sounding like a personal narrative, but should be your definition of a word.